pain and guilt within me.
Feeling of a loss,
that can't be fulfilled.
Charm of this night,
I now remember...
the hills,
the fog....
the cold....
and your cozy hold.
You snuggling into me;
You snuggling into me;
I remember... i remember it all.
With you besides me,
i felt so whole.
My heart on fire,
effect of that magical smile alone.
The memories come back,
haunting my senses,
robbing my calm,
murdering my loneliness...
it's you, just you...
The way your eyes spoke,
i gave into all,
whatever you asked for.
Oh yes, I remember,
I remember it all.
The feel of your touch,
sent pangs of love;
intoxicating my body...
mind...
heart...
and my soul;
you attracted me like a bug...
You ruled me, my world,
I was a slave,
commanded...
and dumped.
Yet, you my princess, are still..
adored...
and loved.
19 comments:
nice poetry.
Nice poetry for sure.
MAY BE YOU SHOLD TRY CHANGING THE THEME..it will be more appealing then
I am sure you could have done much better. The last picture is nice
you're an amazing writer !
& i so wish someone would write for me too !
good one .... really touching :)
The worst poem you ever wrote! :x...
"I was a slave,
commanded...
and dumped."
This is truth...accept it and forget that B&^%h...Got it?!>..Hope you did :x
I'm seriously very angry with you after this :x :x :x...
Just Fantafabulas Mickey!
Seems like you havn't yet forgotten Ishki?? :|
Nice one! :*
Awesome ... that's a different style for a change.
to whom abt u thinking.....while writing it
nice one
i liked it...
its really nice lekin kab tak rondu poems likhega? :O
Emotions at its best !!!
I dont know wht made u think tht Im gonna abuse u for it :P but I loved the poem to the core, full of emotions and things which you or rather your ego will never let u accept.
Awesome !!
The poem has fluence, flow of emotions and a rhyme , but I didn't like the theme .
Dude learn to forego things in your life which you can't get. Sometimes it is better to let the wound heal instead of scratching it and keeping it open because it came from an amputation. Don't do this to yourself brother . Always remember ,those who left you to cry and never worth to be cried upon for .
Beautiful Peom again. :-)
Wow... thanxx everyone for the wonderful comments...[:p]
@ Janu .... forgotten her already... its just some mood swings[;)]
@ ashi... naah.. i have forgotten her[:d] or rather.. the grapes are sour.
@ simmi... thanxx god u dint react overtly... seems my initial pestering worked[:d] u dint scream[:p][:d]
@ shourie... wow.. its a delight to see u here everytime bro...
thanxx for the awesome comments and ur advice is taken[:)]
IN the end thanxx a ton to all others who commented.
thanxxx a lot.
nothing to comment actually, its nice but not nice....lol....you need to get over it asap...
as everyone suggested....change in theme will make it more appreciable....
Nice peom .. diff one but i agree wth genius !
Flow is all good and the fashion of emotions, beautiful yaar... for me it's all beautiful the depth of the feelings, it's hard to dig and extract it unlike others... and give it a damn if anyone's comment tastes sour, write and write till you feel you feel the end of it.. coz it's the passion!
It is awesome, dude :)
I could feel whatever your meant the readers to feel. Got every emotion. You are very expressive.
Keep the good work :)
no doubt the creation z really very nice, romantic, erotic bt plz nw don't think about past n knw what love z sick n stop behaving like a kid their z nothing like love exist on this planet n rest u know baby...
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