Swordsman moves,
slashing, cutting and hacking.
Pike man defends,
ducking, dancing and distancing.
Cavalry strikes,
swiftly, orderly and pouncing.
Bowman twinged,
hastily, accurately and covering.
Amid this chaos,
walks a lonely sage.
White gown, streaked red.
his heart bleeding, and emotions dead.
Broken sword,
beneath his feet.
Abandoned hammer,
lies on street.
A head rolled,
on ground in his path.
Amid all sorts of limbs,
some with weapons still attached.
Amid this chaos,
walks a lonely sage.
White gown, streaked red.
his heart bleeding, and emotions dead.
Ears throbbed,
with screams of dying.
Eyes watered,
with clouds of dust and smoke, flying.
Mind numb at,
ruthlessness and butchery by man.
Heart in torment at,
treachery and deceit by God.
Amid this chaos,
walks a lonely sage.
White gown, streaked red.
heart bleeding, and emotions dead.
Why in the name of God?
How can man be so ruthless?
Is it the man’s intolerance;
or is it God’s insolence?
Why for the religion?
Is it not just a path to reach almighty?
What do they gain?
Why so much pain?
Inside the lonely sage,
rages a storm and chaos.
White gown, streaked red,
his heart bleeding and emotions dead.
In the name of God,
they fight and kill.
For the sake of religion,
they break all the rules it preaches.
Where’s the God?
For whom they fight?
Where is the religious doctrine,
that preaches peace and human rite.
Here stands the lonely sage,
enlightened in a personal way.
Its no God, but Human,
we must believe in.
Its not religion, but humanity,
that we must preach and follow.
The only path to peace is,
by being a human;
who is common to every religion.
Here stands he, the lonely sage,
calm and smiling.
White gown, white again;
heart thumping joyously,
and emotions reeling peacefully.
16 comments:
nice one.........i like it and guess no one read it yet.......
Cool, I thought John Lennon is dead :P
Chronicles of a lonely Sage…<<< Firstly it's a great work but there as the poem passes by 3rd or 4th para lines it deviates from the genre of the title of peom...Lonely sage and till 3rd para lines it expresses fighting with loneliness and walking ahead but why do we talk about god and humanity values in a lonely poem?
@beerboy
Any lonely man with violence around him can obviously strive for peace, god, humanity, etc. Besides anything positive and inspiring in poem should not be questioned :-)
welll.......itz awesome !! nicely filled up.. Good one !
Everyone who thinks this is a lonely poem, it is not. This poem depicts a religious war.. perhaps a crusade or a jihad. This poem has nothing to do with sage being lonely. For havens sake, sages are always lonely. It is about a sage observing and watching the results of such a war. It is about what then he believes can rid humanity of such animalistic behavior when God did not. The lonely is just a word and used as an adjective to notify that the sage was alone in this ordeal and had no disciples around.
I thought the sage will die watching all that, ended up smiling, how cruel!
does this great work really need comments to be praised???
well bro we all know that you are a fantabulous writer it is very easy for you to express the difficult emotions of life in few words you are blessed with this and i really hope that you should keep up this great work throughout your life...God bless you...
hey good one dude...keep it up with the same spirit....all the best...
awesome........................
killer poem...!
M YOUR FAN...!!!
Any lonely man with violence around him can obviously strive for peace, god, humanity, etc. Besides anything positive and inspiring in poem should not be questioned :-)
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Dear Chirag,
I am an inspiring one too, and i know how it feels to get comments and compliments moreover i am a friend of Varun from three Long years, so i preferably prefer my friend to improve whatever he writes, i gave my opinion, and Opinions are personal, do you know that? :)
and lemme tell you, Varun's choices and his recent writings was much focused on loneliness and Loneliness happens by the lacking of passion in Love, mating, sadness, when there is no one to rely on, and these things are purely personal, related to your soul and heart... so why does world has to do something with your personal soul matter ha?...
Peace, God, Humanity are complete different things from Loneliness
For E.G if you are living under War situations and you have really loving mate with you on those hard times...are you Lonely then?...i hope you get what i mean, I am not a pro, i am just learning :), and i do have my own Opinions and this is not my controversial voice but clarifying you :)
WOW..
U write so well..
How to make a website
amazing ;)
Ok fine beerboy, well if you think I was offensive about your opinions I apologize. And yeah you were right about varun's new dimension of writing poems :O
But he did well, am not an expert but it looks good to me :)
I simply LOVED this one!!...Considering the length of the poem, I expected it to be quite a pedestrian one. But, I can now keep extolling after having gone through the poem. No flaws as far as I can see. :-)
Ok fine beerboy, well if you think I was offensive about your opinions I apologize. And yeah you were right about varun's new dimension of writing poems :O
But he did well, am not an expert but it looks good to me :)
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No need of apology chirag, and thank you for understanding my plight, i think we should discuss or debate about any writing for better understanding :)
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